Sheets of glass
sheets of ice
your empty words
won't suffice
like shards of glass they pierce my heart
will I forever be in the dark?
about your motives, tricks & lies,
you say it's nothing,
that it's alright,
but I failed to read between the lines,
and now I'm tangled in your poisonous vines,
and for me those words are nothing more
than old wives tales and rumors and lore,
as cold and bitter as the winter frost
here nothing's wrong and nothing's right,
and in the end,
I lay frozen,
beneath the sheets of glass and ice.
[This poem sounds a bit (maybe a lot) confused. But I wanted to depict the state of mind of someone who's very broken and betrayed and does not know what to think. Hope it's good enough!]
sheets of ice
your empty words
won't suffice
like shards of glass they pierce my heart
will I forever be in the dark?
about your motives, tricks & lies,
you say it's nothing,
that it's alright,
but I failed to read between the lines,
and now I'm tangled in your poisonous vines,
and for me those words are nothing more
than old wives tales and rumors and lore,
as cold and bitter as the winter frost
here nothing's wrong and nothing's right,
and in the end,
I lay frozen,
beneath the sheets of glass and ice.
[This poem sounds a bit (maybe a lot) confused. But I wanted to depict the state of mind of someone who's very broken and betrayed and does not know what to think. Hope it's good enough!]
Grazie :D (Italian again) :)
ReplyDeleteYou portrayed the shattered, crushed, pressed, preserved in broken-ness. Plenty good enough.
ReplyDeleteHow sad to be betrayed ~ You have described it well - being frozen beneath the sheets of glass and ice ~
ReplyDeleteso well written.....
ReplyDeleteThank you so much! :D
ReplyDeleteYou composed it, from your heart ... of course, it's good enough!!
ReplyDeletethat came from deep within... betrayal is a hard thing to recover from...take the lessons learned with you...
ReplyDeleteI think you nailed it!
ReplyDelete(last comment for me I tried 4 time to get past your robot trap - life is too short, nothing personal)
Oh I'm so sorry! :O
DeleteAnd thank you for taking the time to read it! :D
I think you portrayed this feeling well...it's accurate that in that type of situation of betrayal one doe s become frozen emotionally. Thank you for your perspective and fro writing to this challenge!
ReplyDeleteso cold....such strong imagery :/
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